After reading your profile, I was sufficiently curious to check this out. It’s wonderful, and you are right to be proud of it. It has a stream-of-consciousness feel to it that is leisurely and well-paced, much like a relaxing car ride.
My favorite line is: Clouds are much more forgiving than stars, it’s their nature.
LoA

I enjoyed the first sentence of each paragraph. And even though it sounds rambly, it is also poetic. I can see why you like it!