I really like this story. Strong first ever.

I’ll add more flavor on your blog post, but I’m glad more folks are playing along now.

Great first effort!

I just happened to have the soundtrack to “Memento” on when I read this. This is a terrificly told character introduction. Cheers.

Brilliant! This is a perfect example of what this medium can do. I loved the last line. Although I’m getting more of a Quantum Leap feel than Memento to this.

Thank you all. And yeah, I’ll admit proudly to a certain Quantum Leap-ness to it. I hadn’t thought of Memento when I wrote it, but I think that is in there as well.

Ok, I had to write a sequel to this. It doesn’t quite live up to the original, but I just couldn’t let the idea die. It was such an interesting little piece that I had to expand on it. I hope you like it.