I really liked your use of imagery here, it was a very vivid work that really let my mind go to work. I also like that it had great opportunity for growth on both ends, something that I’m finding quite a challenge in my own ficlets.
I put together a quick prequel since I had an interesting idea as to what this poor bastard was sorry for and the fact that you don’t have her forgive him is awesome. I tried to stick with the strong symbols as you did. Hope you enjoy.
Steve Fairweather