The details in here are great. The momentum is great. The clarity is, uh, less good. I’m a little confused by the action here. It reads like you’ve done a lot of cutting to make it fit. I love me lovelorn pilots, though.

I agree with Will. The language is superb, but I’m left confused as to what exactly is going on. A fun read though.

I’ll be looking for an excuse to drop the phrase “hacking flam fire” into casual conversation. Nice.

I was able to follow it okay on my second read after I read the Wikipedia entry about Corrigan you linked to on your blog, but it was a little confusing the first time.