i like this dialogue and the desperation revealed. i think you need a different title…maybe a number!

Thanks! Yeah, the title was a bit much. Here’s a different on. :)

i love the title! it’s perfect, even if i am interpreting it wrong. this is the perfect opening to a great thriller, i think.

You actually wrote something that wasn’t all numbers. Even if it wasn’t good (although it is), I would have rated it highly! :)