I tried to resolve the inconsistency that John pointed out by establishing the relationship between the two companies as being part of a larger coalition. This also addresses why they would both be vying for the same “bonus” referred to earlier.

This is great. I love the juxtaposition with the humor you infuse against the seriousness that I put in there and Ridcully trying to balance us both out.

I really liked this, and it really added a lot to further the plot bringing in the kidnapping, as a dinner topic even.

Great addition, and it adds lots more potential for other developments on the home front.

The bit about Angela’s kidnapping four years ago is genius

LoA

Brilliant way of bringing the threads together. Had a chuckle at “Crimson Fist on Serpent Island”

Yes, I loved the detail of kidnapping as a dinner topic. It places this series in a certain realm that’s fun to visit for a while, but you probably wouldn’t want to live in.