Nicely done :) I like the graphic depiction of her state at the start, the denial, and the way that the man seems to succeed in getting through, but also to potentially seal his fate. The father aspect is interesting too…there’s potential there for him to be the father in question, which might make the escaping bullet a much bigger source of conflict for the girl :) I thought it would have been more realistic with expletives, but I can understand wanting to avoid them :)

Wonderful turn of events – described with flair and your own inimitable style. I really want to know what happens next… : ) Thanks so much for lending your talent to this series, Ana.

Great emotion in the scene. And the description of the man’s eyes really helped me visualize. Now I’m off to read the prequel.

I had no idea this series kept going. Never ceases to amaze when things I originally thought would be a one or two-shot ficlet snowball into a series. Powerful stuff in this one.

Okay, I have to go back and read the rest of the series now, because this was intense!

(sidebar: he ignorantly realizes he’s already read some of the early installments in the series).

wow he really got her attention with a line like that. I can almost picture this unfold in my mind. Her holding the gun and him pleading for his life. what an intense situation. Very well written.