Ooh, great job keeping up the creepy factor and even taking it up a notch or two. I appreciate this victim’s point of view. And you left it just open enough I think I can continue the series with this left in. Nicely done and thanks for adding a sequel!

Since I went ahead and just kept the flow going off of yours, I thought I’d let you know a sequel is up. ‘Pretty Things’ continues.

well written continuation. I enjoyed the footsteps of the voice walking away at the end, it gives me the sense that this thing is more substantial than just a voice and possibly more powerful, even though we can’t actually see it, we hear it’s heavy body hoof away.

Another sequel is up, along down the line, and I finally used the line that you set up for me. Thanks again!

yup, notched up the creep factor for sure.

I agree with Kermitgorf and everyone else. You did a good job. You deffinately took the creep factor up a notch.

Not only could this be a victim’s point of view, it could almost be a dream/nightmare of Gordo’s. That’s how I see it, anyway.