Very intriguing fantasy stuff with some cutting descriptions of your heroine. Feels a bit rushed, maybe cause of a few typo/verb tense sorts of things.

I’d really have to thank you. It’s both an experiment on fantasy, both in my aquisition of English language, since I’m not a mother speaker. Being almost self-taught, I’m starting to feel that I’m not a bad teacher. For myself, I mean.
Your comment is appreciated because he spurs me into doing better and gives me some insight, thank you