Something about the wording of that second and third paragraph feels off. The second one in particular. I get the feeling you were constrained by the character limit trying to describe him on his side and the two of them pretty much back to back. It comes off a little rough.
Other than that, I like the addition of a new character, and the additional concept that GlobTrack sees them as possible traitors given the fact that they survived. I may have something tonight, if not, then tomorrow.

Hmmmm… I am inclined to agree John. I have rewritten the paragraphs concerned, hopefully they flow better now.

Ah yes, this feels better. Explains the situation more clearly, and it flows better. Good re-write.

The assumption that they’re traitors makes sense. I’ve never heard of Egyptian snake beer. Where can I find some?