what are htey dooing that would affect earth? hmmm thinking

Nice sequel to it.
I really like it.
And like how you kept the feelings of Earth.

This is the first science fiction writing I’ve seen from you.
I think it’s got some strong potential, and I want to see where this is going.

Lovely, thoughtful and then pulled back to reality by a tether. Great stuff…very 2001, I think.

Lovely, thoughtful and then pulled back to reality by a tether. Great stuff…very 2001, I think.

I loved the descriptive imagery in the beginning and I agree with THX ’s comment about it being pulled back to reality with a tether.

Beautiful continuation of the original. You kept the feeling and the emotional tension of the story intact here.

stars sparkled like little diamond tacks holding up a black curtain. i would have used the mtaphor over the smilie like--The sparkling stars where just tiny tacks that held the black curtain of space from sliding down the wall. But i always believe a good similie would make an awesome metaphor.
The earth looked so tiny, like a model globe from school. It was hard to imagine life down there being anything but grand-The earth was just a tiny globe from my elementary school som many lifetimes ago

stars sparkled like little diamond tacks holding up a black curtain. i would have used the mtaphor over the smilie like The sparkling stars where just tiny tacks that held the black curtain of space from sliding down the wall. But i always believe a good similie would make an awesome metaphor.
The earth looked so tiny, like a model globe from school. It was hard to imagine life down there being anything but grand*The earth was just a tiny globe from my elementary school so many lifetimes ago. i luv meta

phors sorry about the error in the front but i really think your similis have really vivd verbs. The line about the stars being tacks holding up space is fereakin crazy that is like something i will have to remember to steal from you in the future as a matter of fact i am going to use that now.lol And the comparison to a globe amazing it transport the reader to your class, its like i could almost swell the pentagon shaped pizza at the lunch room, and the way tiny hands grabbed small yellow trays that is two