nice twist! I like the character development also. It was a lot of things in quick succession, made it hard to digest, but it was all relevant information. Also, I personally, don’t think you need to clarify that the element is a she, I got it right away. :) I’m very interested in reading more!

Very helpful feedback, thank you.
More to come…

I removed that part as you suggested; you’re right it was irrelevant.