Solid addition to the story, not hijacking his storyline or being a twerp, just adding another point of view and even keeping within the theme and feel. Kudos to you, sir.

Yeah, what THX said… lol!
Actually, you did a great job matching Ben’s story and style. Good Addition.

Thanks little bro…nice job…

Had to throw a “new character” monkey wrench into my evil plans though, didn’t you!

hehe…

Now…shall I integrate into my story or shun you forever…hmmm…..

Thanks for the comments! Yeah, I’m trying not to hijack the story…this particular style of sci-fi really isn’t my strong point, but I tried to match Ben’s storytelling style in it. Just figured I’d throw in another perspective.

As far as the “new character” wrench goes, maybe he just dies there.