Lots of potential here in a very carefully described scene. I like that it could be spy thriller or sci-fi, just too early to tell.

I’m not sure if the average person wears a gilet around the house, unless they’re Chuck Noris, but then it would be made of denim.

David also has the wicked mad skills of Jason Bourne with a hint of Lara Croft, which clearly makes him cool in my book. I’m in anxious anticipation of him punching the intruder in the throat while coldly saying “Don’t lie to me”

I had to look up what a ‘gilet’ was, which is awesome because that took me on a tangent of learning about clothing for almost an hour.
Great scene, superb descriptions.

“that particular shade of black that really is just a lack of colour.”

That’s my favourite shade of black.

I really want to know what he was doing crawling in the bathroom window too? makes me want to know more. You’re an amazingly gifted writer, gripping scene, such descriptions!
if you’re not a professional author, you should be.

Hey there JMSquire… Wow, that is cool – I love the idea that something I ‘put out there’ started someone off on a whole new ‘net journey; thanks for letting me know. And yeah, that is the best kind of black – I’m stoked that you agree :-)

Heya Kermitgorf… WOW ! That is an amazing thing you said to me there. I really cannot tell you how amazing that made me feel when I read it. Thank you so much – I just hope I can continue to live up to such high praise… If I get some time tomorrow I will be looking through your stuff (have added you as a contact), but once I’ve answered today’s comments I must go to bed; it’s nearly 2 a.m. here and I need to be up in 4.5 hours to get to my day job.