oh, wait, so this must be the good guys….I’m a little confused at who’s who, and the addition of a mark is yet another element to the plot to remember.

I have this written in novel format – it’s so hard to put it all in ‘shorts’.
is it too much?

I’ve streamed-lined this chapter a little – concentrating more on the moment, rather than foreshadowing some more.

I like this a lot so far, but I’d probably like it better in novel form. It’s just a tad confusing as is.

ya.. that seems to be the general consensus.

I may restart this – like a reboot, but make it better.