Ok, this is definitely a middle piece meant to be a quick “catch-up” on the story so far and to set-up the next chain of events… go easy on me, LOL ! ;)
Interesting. Does more than catch up. It tells us that Eric is a peon, even if he acts like a king, and that Dreanna is special. I don’t remember her being special coming up before, but my memory went on a date with my youth and stayed out way past curfew. I think you gave yourself a challenge here and pretty much pulled it off. Ton of info, well told, and sets up the future. The comm stuff works well for your scenario, but suffers from the format, I think.
“but my memory went on a date with my youth and stayed out way past curfew” that was a true lol moment for me and you should have used that line in a story & not wasted it on a comment to me :) Since tidbits of the story are sloshing around my brain… I guess it was more of a catch-up to me. I’ve dropped a few hints but this is the first time I’ve actually stated a few of the facts completely. Again, very useful feedback. This one was a challenge and I’m still not sure about its execution.
I found this interesting as well. It stands out from the storyline, as it’s told in a totally different type of narrative. Change can be very refreshing and intriguing.
Here, the mechanic / robotic exchange seemed very exciting. I’m beginning to wonder…evolved or advanced, or one via the other.
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