I’m kind of getting confuse on who’s talking there in the middle. Is that Eric talking about the link being affected (you should change that to “affected” by the way), or is Kerr talking to someone else in his memory? Who’s nanotech? Eric’s or Ker’s?
Also, I think you meant “abuzz.” It’s one word.
I think going into his memory to experience the event is a very good device, I’m looking forward to seeing what happens.

“Ker linked back.” Did I simply miss this the first time? Holy cow, my bad. Ignore most of my first comment.

I get it! Instead of Ker telling the story, Eric reached into his mind and viewed his memory…

I dig it!

John&#8230; got ya! =) I was bouncing back and forth between &#8220;a buzz&#8221; and &#8220;abuzz&#8221; I think you&#8217;re right, it should be the later.<br />Ben, initially I was going to have him tell the story then the idea struck me to have them all view it.
Thanks for the feedback guys!

Ah. It was a bit unclear, here, but reading the comments fixed it for me. The transition from “current” to “flashback” was awkward, but I’m with ya now.

@that guy, fighting with the 1024 limit and the content I wanted to squeeze into this piece. If I’d had more characters, I would have smoothed the transition.

Ha, touche’.