Your conversations and use of the high tech is spot on here. The tiniest thing though, the last sentence lost me a bit, I had to read it 2 or 3 times to figure it out.
Great work… looking forward to the next chapter!

Yeah, it is a bit unclear. First half of the payment. It arrived. Good business.

More’s coming, keep it tuned!

And I really appreciate the honest critique you guys have been giving me. As I’ve said before, paring down the stories to fit this format is tough for me, but challenging. I’m having a lot of fun with it, though, and I’m really liking the direction everything is going. You keep readin’, I’ll keep writin’!

What a great concept! The netrunner’s vantage point. Very inspired! I’m impressed! ;)

Nice job!

As you know from reading my “Möbius Strip” series on here, I’m struggling with the 1024 challenge too.
I’m trying to be honest and fair with my comments because I’ve really benefited from other’s doing that to me on here.
This is really a great series and I really enjoy your writing style. Keep em coming!

I gotta concur with Kev here. I think the character limit is making it difficult for you to get the nuance of your story across. I’m following along somewhat, but a lot of this gets a little jumbled and confusing. I do like your writing style though, and you’re keeping things fast paced which is nice. Sometimes I just have to go through a couple times to catch up.

hey they have a book called fifty word stories i love it but it shows you how really unneeded alot of our discriptive narritive really is