There we go, back into the real meat of the story. And the pilot’s name is finally revealed…don’t know why I didn’t before. Probably because I couldn’t think of one. Kent. Real original. Imaginative. Anyway, the series should pick up again…I’m starting to get a real direction in my mind.

Nice, man. It seems sort of like an anime, spread out over episodes, especially with the multiple viewpoints… which I like. a lot.

You’ve inspired me to write cyberpunk again, dude. :D

I like the idea of moving between characters, and now that I know it’s what you’re doing I’m having an easier time following along.
One thing. I think “I grit my teeth” is present tense, and the rest of the story is in past tense. I don’t think “gritted” sounds right either. Not sure what you can do, but it definitely feels like a tense switch.

I struggled with that too: grit/gritted. It was late, I’ll probably just change the line.

And I’m hella glad to inspire, Amo, thanks for the comment! Keep up!

And yeah, so far we have 3 character view-points. Benny the Bagman, Kent the pilot, and the as-yet-unnamed netrunner/decker. Browncoatben has expressed that he likes “Red” too, and is interested in her, but I think that’s just cuz she’s redheaded and has jubblies. Either way, she might become a major part in the story too.

She seems like a potential love interest for your unnamed protagonist. For some reason, I don’t get the feeling Benny is interested in relationships.

hey…keep your protagonist off my jubblies! Those are my jubblies!

Nice piece, THAT Guy!

I agree with John, I’m use to the multiple viewpoints and it does make the story easier to follow.