I think that last paragraph moves too fast. Maybe that exchange should have been it’s own fic? But then it would be too verbose. Eh, it’s a learning process to get it right.

I didn’t think it was too fasts. I thought this one had some really funny stuff in it with a great description of the action part.

Never give a woman a knife. Especially when that woman didn’t melt like she was supposed to.

Good point That Guy. People who don’t melt when they’re supposed to simply can not be trusted. Hopefully he finds a way out of this though.
@THX, thanks for that. I think my biggest issue is the last sentence needed to be a new paragraph and a little longer. It’s kind of clumsy right now and doesn’t give him the proper pause before thinking it.
Thanks again guys for reading my story and providing comments.

Nice one John. I really enjoyed the last three episodes.
Way to go with the action parts, they are really good!
LoA

@John “last sentence needed to be a new paragraph and a little longer” I think that would be a great addition to this piece.

I love the intermingling of humor with brutality, and the last sentence was great, good turn around.

Thanks guys. I am humbly appreciative of people not only reading my stories, but taking the time to comment on them as well.
@Kev, You and I agree. However the character limit, as she is prone to do, vehemently disagrees. As this story reached ficlet nirvana, I sadly have no characters left to express exactly how hauntingly disturbing Jen’s laugh really was. Believe me though, you would shudder at the mere description of the sound. =P

Phew, I finally managed to think of and implement a sequel. Hope that it is not too out there :-D

At one point I could swear that I heard him cry “uncle”. I love how you sprinkled the action with humor.