This series is intense, but that last paragraph of action in this entry is incredible. Freaking brilliant.

Heh, thanks JM. Glad you’re getting into it.

Again very moving visual descriptions here. Excellent work.

Now I’m kind of confused again. I thought Benny was the “ghost in the machine” as it were. I may need to go back and re-read this from the beginning to sort it all out. The good thing is that you’ve done such a great job, I won’t mind reading it a second time.
And I agree with both Kev and JM. Great action scenes, this most recent one especially.

Nah, it’ll come clearer here in the next few entries, but I’ll clear it up a little. There’s three characters so far: Benny, who is a “bagman,” or a criminal courier. The character in this entry is the voice in Benny’s head, who is a person apart from the scene who is working on the net to coordinate Benny with his surroundings and employers. And Kent, a pilot for a news agency (New Orleans Worldwide News).

More is coming soon!

Ok, I think I got the two mixed up before. I thought Benny was the voice inside the head. Not sure why. It’s probably because I’m from Canada, and they think I’m slow, eh?
Sorry, Simpsons reference I couldn’t resist using.

You’re CANADIAN !? That explains a lot. Haha…just kidding, man. Nah, Benny’s not schizo, he’s actually got someone patched into his head, talking to him.

Actually I’m just slow, so people think I’m Canadian. That was a line from a Simpsons episode. I use it when I need to admit that I’m not so quick on the uptake.
About 20 seconds in on this video:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LRkkXqNoXa8

Nice entry, Guy. Love the action.

hello!
im about to read this later on tonight.
im looking for ideas for my art portfolio theme. :)

my theme is through a killer’s eyes.
browsed google and this sight popped up!

ideas?

Wow, that has got to be the coolest thing I’ve found out this month. This ficlets turns up as #1 on a google search with the exact phrase “Through a Killer’s Eyes.” I’ve been googleized.

Anyway, dude, I’m not sure how I can help ya. Throw me a note with what you’re gunning for, and I’ll see if I can throw some ideas at you. I’m no artist though, just a regular joe with a part-time writing fetish.

well im trying to create pieces that resemble what a killer might think. since they obviously think of everything differently. but i mean its hard to know what someone like that thinks of.
maybe a morbid piece but not violent. just subtly resembling something violent.

if you dont have any idea what im talking about or what feedback to give its okay. haha. its a hard topic. i always have hard topics for art =\
i just have to have an idea in sketch by friday. :P

thanks for replying though!