a study in character building and brevity. I failed at at least one of my tasks.
Lovely character study. I felt I had no choice but to write a sequel.
Neat story idea and visual scene here. Didn’t quite follow the first sentence of second paragraph.
@ THX 0047 : Thanks for the crit. :) I’m not always the best at making paragraphs flow together, but I’m working on it. @pat J: Yay, I inspired someone!
@ THX 0047 : Thanks for the crit. :) I’m not always the best at making paragraphs flow together, but I’m working on it.
@pat J: Yay, I inspired someone!
Spiro, Spero
Pat J
THX 0477
Spiro, Spero