Ouch. Did not see that coming. Nice job on using the challenge to create a sort of disconnected, dreamlike feel for the character, unsure of what’s going on and just a little out of it. Then BAM ! Surprise ending.

Great entry, very disorienting and then tragic!

Good slow feel and then a tragic, twisted ending. I like it.
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it makes you wince in pain. a very unexpected ending and very sad. You almost foreshadowed it in the beinging with the he hoped he remembered how to put the chute up. Awesome entry.
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Wow. That is a really good entry. The ending was very surprizing.

nicely done!

Wonderful job! I think I actually jumped at the end. :/