Got lost for a sec on who was talking again, after the internal thoughts. Probably just me doing a quick read, but still with two female characters and a break in dialog it might help to use a name instead of ‘she’.
Aside from that I do like where the story is going. You two definitely have these characters wrapped around and tied in knots.

It was more likely me doing too quick of a writing job. Again, great suggestion. I tried to clean it up a bit (the character count is a rascal though).

You seem to have cleaned it up quite nicely because there was no confusion for me when I read it just now. You did an excellent job.

You seem to have cleaned it up quite nicely because there was no confusion for me when I read it just now. You did an excellent job.

Yeah it was a lil confusing.. You see becca talking and then a line below it in quotes.. Who’s to say if that was Becca or Sassy.. Its kewl tho..

I like the part where she is wondering who this person was standing beside her. Almost like she is ashamed to know her, due to all the crazy things shes been saying.

Wasn’t confusing to me!

I like the last line. Shivs rule!