this was off one little thought I had and now it seems a bit short. Tell me what you think.
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awww I like it..it’s short but meaningful.. and this is the case…a lot! Some guys are too ridiculously delirious…its kinda sad!
Good job!

Agree with howhardlife is. Plus, it was very well written.

i like it. but i agree that some of the lines seem a little short. i mean its still good but each lines seems too choppy to me. but then again i suck at poetry so maybe im just missing something.

It is a free write form of a poem. You should get into poetry, it is fun to write.
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