Harsh. That’s all I can say. But it was a really good ficlet.

Nice little confrontation you’ve got going here. One thing I’d like to suggest is that you turn away from using “I said,” “she said,” etc. after every piece of dialog. You should only need a couple of them per conversation, especially between just two people. And I’d also recommend that you use italics for thoughts.

yes. definitely harsh. but it was good, minus a few grammar mistakes and a little too much direct explanation.