You did an awesome job of describing how Jameson saw Becca and what his reaction to her was.

Love the luxurious description of the woman of his dreams…who is intent on breaking his heart.

I loved her excuse for being late was that she couldn’t find parking, since the bar’s empty. I found that particularly funny, but then again the bar could be right next to a movie theater or something. Like THX , I loved the description of Becca and cringe a little bit knowing she’s out to get poor Jameson.

You have sequel, though it’s nowhere near as good as this masterpiece.

The description of the girl made my heart warm =)

lol good description of becca and his reaction to her .. awesome how she slithered on to the bar stool.