I can sense a showdown!

Do I see CyberRed in the future?? :)

Ha…Now if I answered either one of those comments, I’d be giving away important plot items!

“A dusty stacks,” doesn’t quite work. Need to remove the “A” or the make “stacks” singular.
I loved the line “[l]eft leg was stretched out in front of her on the bed, the other…wasn’t.” Really well delivered.

Whoops! Good catch, John. I originally had that as “A dusty stack of magazines sat on top of a table” or something like that, and changed it around last minute to reach Nirvana.

Heh, interesting side-note, I’d also totally forgotten Kent’s name in “A Little Less Red.” I published it first as “Kevin Johnson,” but it kept bugging me. Had to go back to figure it out…and I’m not entirely sure that this was the first time I got it wrong!

Again…delivery is everything…and you’re nailing it.

The way things are revealed is so natural and fluid.

Nice work.