I love how this is written!! Your a very promising writer! Please continue!

Ack!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I am loving this. It isn’t what I expected at all, you promising writer, you.
By the by, I think you might want Sassy to recommend them going to another bar, because Old Bess had never seen Becca before. I am itching to write a sequel, so keep your eyes peeled.

Love it, love it, love it!

aww.. how cute is that! its almost like you could put this in a movie!

That was great, with a bit of a ribauld comment slipped in there…very subtle. I liked the whole note thing, perfect bit of how he was feeling at that moment, juxtaposed with how things actually turned out.