Another great addition Ben. One tiny pick, in the 6th paragraph you have She was standing in a room that looked identical to his own. Her naked body was the same dark shade of gray as his own. Both sentences ending in his own so close is hard to read. What if you changed the last one to _ Her naked body, the same dark shade of gray as him_?
Just a thought. :)

I must’ve missed these last couple posts somewhere…
One typo I saw…erratic.
Other than that, looks great!