AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

AWESOME !!!!!

OMG that is the scariest thing i have ever heard… nice detail about the evil grin I can just imagine it (Shudder) Great job!

OMG ! I fell out of my chair screaming. Almost. But, pretty much.
LoA

HE BETTER BE HOTT !!! lol

Excellent development! I can honestly say I don’t think I would have seen (envisioned?) this coming. Great work.

It’s time. Very ominous line.

GAH !!!!!

Ooh, crazy circumstances and not what I think anyone expected. Not sure I’m a fan of switching to present tense, and a few typos, but what the heck, it’s a work in progress, right.

woah. I didn’t see that one coming!!
LoA

O_O that was not what I expected! What a great twist! And super scary. I think I may have nightmares

AHHHHHHHH !!!!!!!!!!!!!
omg not what I expected at all!!!!
OMG OMG OMG OMG
TIME FOR WHATTT !!!
NO WONDERBALL ! WHYYYY!

OH CRAP .
that is not good.
but awesome job.
wow…
creepy

Great setup… but why the whole tense-switcharoo? Stylistic thing, maybe? I don’t know; but great anyway

OHH …EEM GEE !!
this story is so great but crap its frickin scary! .but exciting