Good beginning, but is this the same protagonist as in the last post? It’s a little confusing why a she-wolf would be daydreaming about another she-wolf until you read over the passage a few times. I would also suggest changing the second half of the first paragraph and all of the second paragraph from “was” to “had been” to make it clearer that this part is the narrator’s recollection of what had happened in the past, prior to the timeframe of the narration.
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