Very sweet with a consistent sort of rhythm to it. If I were to change anything, I’d connect the statement to the ‘He whispered’, making it ”…back for you,” he whispered.” Otherwise for a second they seem like separate things, like he said it then whispered something else. But your way kind of works too, with the meter and rhythm you have over all. Eh, just food for thought.

awww. this is sooooo sweet. write a sequel!!!! lol =)

thanks you guys.