Excellent, so much tension here you could make a stew. I love the one line so much, “painting the whole porch with potential harm”, amazing wording.

The way you write your ficlets is almost poetic. You are a ficlet god!

I’m going to agree with the two previous comments. Great job.
I think you’ve missed something in this line though, “Before Sissy stop that little bit of pee from escaping.” Maybe the word “could?”

You do have a very poetic style; gives a crystal clear image… But what’s gonna happen next?! I’m on the edge of my seat (Not only are you poetic, you’re good with suspense…hm… poetically suspensful…? suspensfully poetic…?)

I thought the second “paint” reference was a little bit repetitive. Good job nonetheless.

I love how you’ve drawn the characters to this fateful moment, each with their own motivation. Can’t wait to see the explosive scene play out.

very suspenseful.. Excellent wording.. One of your best! :)

Very clear picture, descriptive,menacing character.