I highly suggest you break this up into multiple paragraphs. It will make it much easier to read.
Not sure if you plan to continue this as a series or not, especially since it’s your first and only ficlet at the moment. If you do, looks like you’ve got the makings for some interesting storytelling here. Sometimes the most troubling subjects are the most compelling, and inspiring.
Good luck on the journey if you plan to continue it.

With everything before it, that last line takes on an even more ominous tone.