It should read elegantly dressed man, and where it reads “you’re father,” I think you meant your.
I am a sucker (ha, ha) for vampire stories, so you’ve certainly got my attention!

Dark & mysterious.

i agree with my name is.. When you mentioned european accent, for some reason the person talking spoke in a British accent.

Nice classic vampire tale, full of personal history and an aloof, mocking villain. At first I didn’t like the run-on, but it totally fit the frightened rambling you were trying to get across.