Cool. Good pacing and nice sense of action in here. Though, I still think you could have introduced the chief in this one.
Also, before Pyro gets in here to beat me to the punch, “not Advanced Cybercrime?â€? is a statement, not a question. And it should be “and get your ass” down there.
Finally, ever since the Furby was released, I thought they should implement a similar system in cars. They should all talk to each other, so that was cool to see you use something like that here.

I’m looking forward to see where this series goes, Kev. John’s got a handle on all the editing, though, so that’s all I have to say.

And I’m sure I’m probably just asking for a spoiler, but I didn’t know (and still don’t, really) what “REMORA” was, and apparently all I can find is that it’s some kind of fish, and also a music project by some guy named Brian John Mitchell. Whoever that is. I’m assuming that REMORA is neither fish, nor Mitchell Music.

@John, Good catch on the edits, the Advanced Cybercrime used to be part of a sentence but I changed it and forgot the punctuation. You for your is a bad habit of mine… do it all the time. I had the idea for the NetWay for a long time. Embedded markers in the road along with a central network and local area info share between cars would prevent lots of wrecks… in you’ve ever driven Houston rush hour traffic, you’d understand.

@JLaughter – glad you are enjoying the series… I’d be lying if I didn’t admit to being inspired by BagMan. :)
The definition of REMORA will come a little later… but I’ll give you a hint I was thinking more of the fish.

The pacing is fantastic here, great action and details.

Again, thanks Ana. I rewrote this piece about 1,000 times to get the pacing down… actually I wasn’t really happy with it when I posted.
As always, I do appreciate the comments from everybody.