Getting intense, I love the switching points of view covering the action. It gives it such a greater feeling of action, and a wider view of the situation is neat too. Keep em coming, I love this series.

Heh, thanks for the great comments, JM. And everyone else! This series is a lot of fun to write, but it’s very rewarding for me to have you guys reading along as I pump it out.

Keep reading, and make all checks payable to JLaughter!

And the perspective changes are really starting to come together into what I originally wanted to do with them. Multiple views, seamlessly flowing through one continuous scene.

These past few have really brought the multiple views into the fold as an integral part of the story, rather than simply a device to tell the story. It’s a testament to your ability as a writer to do it so well that it feels natural rather than tacked on.
Is it “on the 35th floor” or “in the 35th floor?” Does it matter? Either way, we should give her some leeway since she’s ad-libbing while hanging out the side of a VTOL .

Great piece and I love the way that you flip between the vantage points without it feeling like a device.

Great action in this one too.

Could be either or, John… “on(in) the 35th floor…” Both read smoothly, and both make sense. I just went with “on” because it sounds more like the fire’s not engulfing the entire floor yet.
And thanks for the praise on the viewpoints. This has been a very interesting experiment, swapping view-points so frantically in such a fast-paced plot…in first-person, no less. It’s a helluva lotta fun!

I think my issue is with the relationship between “in” and “floor.” It’s not “in” the floor, it’s “on” it. But maybe it’s because I’m not thinking of the 35th floor as a three dimensional space. Probably a result of my mental retardation caused by a decade of alcoholism and drug abuse.

You know, John, I like you a little bit more every day.

Hey Jon…I’m gonna put my boot in/on your ass.

hehe…see ya tomorrow!