My First

WELCOME TO FICLETS !

some spelling and puncuation errors, also saying “I noticed” after they called out the 4 numbers is a bit unneeded, since obviously they called 4 numbers and 4 people showed up. If less than 4 draftees came up then I noticed would have fit.
Also, the last sentence is a bit rushed.
It might have added to the story if he mentioned a love or friendship he will be torn from.

Aw, dang. I wanted to give you your first comment. :(. Oh well.
Note to Krultar: He was noticing what they looked like/how they acted. So it isn’t terrible word choice really…
My note to you, scarlet_raider is to make sure your verb tense stays consistent. If you’re talking is past tense, stay in past tense throughout the whole thing.
Great begining and welcome to ficlets!!!!

Oh, and beginning is spelled with a double n (which is ironic b/c I just misspelled it myself. Haha.)
LoA

thanks for the look over

ficlet revised and updated

First of all, a warm welcome to Ficlets! The addiction starts now, I’m telling you! ;-)
This is a great little fic, but some typos still remain:
In your second paragraph, first line, it’s a run-on sentence. Not sure if this was intentional or not, but it hurts the pacing a bit. Also, overseas is all one word, a compound, in your last sentence it should read “packing and preparing,” and the title should read “The Nation’s Last War.”