Before anybody gets concerned…I like my job and this not autobiographical yearning…just a dark idea I had inspired by the Animatrix.

I hate to say I saw it coming, but I did. Either way, the wording is fantastic, very surreal and free-spirited.
Love this: ”…sent [the phone] the way of my tie without even looking at who it was. Who gives a damn anyway?”
I want to enter this challenge, but I’ve been running dry on ideas. Bagman is taking all my brainpower!

I did NOT see it coming. I was rooting for the guy, thinking yeah, man, hit the beach. Take a break. Feeling jealous, until the end. Wow…

don’t let them talk you out of it ben. Death comes to us all but only some men truly fly out of tall buildings.

I’ve been watching a lot of superhero cartoons lately, so all along I was picturing a guy just learning how to fly cruising along beside a passenger jet. Decent twist to it, I thought and very well written.

That was some twist. The story has a cool carefree feel until the end.

I bounced from flying, to cruising in a convertible, to falling, not really sure until the end. So gruesome!

Great twist, really incredible use of wording too. The last line is a killer, “From the roof, baby!” , almost made me snicker despite the graveness of the suicide.

I kind of guessed, but not until right before the big reveal, but it was still a very well done twist. And the ending was fantastic. Like JM, I loved the last line.
Thanks for entering.

I have to agree with JLaughter, even though I saw the ending coming… extremely well written and paced. A great read.

I was with Ana on this one. I thought he was driving along in a convertible. Could just imagine the goofy grin guys get when the top is down… ;D Then WHAM ! (Literally.) Great, magnificent, job!

ya.. the lead up to the final smack was awesome.

I also thought he was driving with the top down… Great twist!