Okay.. I got a bit carried away with the challenge… ;D

Carried away is good when the story is good!
One small typo – in the second line, it should read whose face.
More, please!

Anna if you keep nit picking people might think your in love. jenunique there is nothing more awesome than being carried away(accept an mlt mutton lettuce and tomato) the story was soooooo good, i wish i was a doctor moreau freak with four arms so i could give it for thumbs up.

Took me a few reads to make sense of it, but I was a bit distracted. Great description of the shift to incorporeal. I think what threw me was the quick twist from concerned ancestor to opportunistic witch.

I don’t mind the “nit picking.” :D (Especially when it is something as important as contraction versus possession.)

Thanks for the comments!! :D

Wow, like THX I wasn’t expecting that twist with the ancestor stealing her body like that. How interesting. Carried away is a good thing when you’re writing (your one of my favorites writers on the site).

O man she took her body.. thats why the reaper keeps coming back for her.. creepy well told series.

That’s messed up. Stealing someone’s body like that. Very well done little series though. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Thanks Jen for posting. This series gave me goosebumps. And you are right, genealogy is addictive.