Thats a really cool twisted twist. The assassin getting assassinated. Nice.

Cool twist. It definitely adds something to the story. Who shot him? Did she know someone was going to shoot him?
One note I have though, is when this comes up, “her words registered like a thunderclap,” he was the last one to speak. I’m thinking you may have had to remove a piece of dialog to fit? If you’ve got room, maybe give her a retort before this final paragraph?
Thank you very much for entering.

You called it John. I didn’t quite have enough space to get everything exactly right. I modified it a bit, hoping to make the ending make a little more sense.

hey i sequeled it just for fun but i killed all the characters in my sequel so to have another sequel it would have to be about the assasin’s contact lense or something, well that gives me an idea. anyhow normally i would have just compliment but you asked for it.

Ah, ok. Now I see it was the husband. In the earlier version this was not clear. Much clearer now, and makes for a more interesting ficlet. Though not as open to a sequel.

Sort of makes me think of Mr. and Mrs. Smith- but we just watched that movie again for the umpteenth time. ;D Loved the story and twist. Wonderful job, as always.

Fun back and forth, and apparently I wasn’t the only one to be a little confused as to what really happened. I think that was the real challenge of this challenge, to set up a scenario and story to a sufficient extent and then have the pay-off/twist…all in an itty-bitty space.

Great twist at the end! And this line gave me chills: The flash of recognition in her eyes was disarming.

Whoa, very smooth last words.

Ha!! That’s awesome!
Nothing like a little revenge!
I love this imagery:
Her statement registered in a thunderclap. Moments before the bullet shattered his skull

Great stuff.

nice. very, very nice.