When I first started reading this I thought it was your entry into the Zen Master Challenge. Too many pain pills I guess.
Back on track. Another solid entry. Two small notes though. I think “Status report” is intended to be a question, and it should be “we’ve reached the scene.” Then again, I’m kind of stoned, so take that with a grain of salt.

Great status report scene. I liked the detail on the communications technology and everything seeming real other that the SpinStream icon.