Nice job on the dialog between the two friends. It worked well to review the situation, put an emotional context on it, and establish an ally of sorts.

I really liked this, but you introduce the nebulous “she” at the end in a way that is a bit confusing. Did you mean to write he? I think it might work better that way – better to keep our mystery woman in the dark for a while longer and prolong the suspense.

Ana -

I felt that too.. the goal was to introduce the female character and too have the story shift to her for a bit. The ultimate idea, is that neither is in control, and that she is in reality just as confused about what is going as he is. The suspense of who is in control, will remain

I got it! I was ready for the “she” because of the lead in “somewhere else”. Nice dialog!