Just a note for John Perkins, should he read this: I wanted to put spaces in between the paragraphs, but I had to take them out so I could fit the whole thing.

Nice, I enjoyed this a lot. Brilliant descriptions.

Very cool. I totally dug this.
Two things. You’ve confused “tail” with “tale.” And in your second to last sentence, you have repeated “to the” twice in a row, like so: “submiting to the to the flames.” Remove one of those sets and you’ll have room for the line breaks. =P
In any case. Good job. Very enjoyable ficlet.

Very good mermaid tale.

Thanks for catching the spelling and such, all fixed.