Ehh, not so sure about this one.

Any feedback is definitely appreciated.

I thought it was lovely, especially the bit about wanting and being wanted in return. And very telling/real/accurate that she likes the things he says, and he likes the way she looks. Only misstep was that grammatically it should be ‘Butterflies mulitplied…’ or you should connect that to the sentence right before it.

I liked it as well. It painted a lovely picture and capture the essence of a first kiss.

i liked it. As i read it, i could feel you struggling with it at the beginning. I know that feeling – it happens to me alot. The words just fight me as i’m trying to put them down…
But as the ficlet went on, and when you started to focus on the two main characters and how they felt, everything started to click for me.