This was very difficult for me as I’m not a poet. Heck, I’m not really even a writer.
I had a lot of fun writing this though, so I hope someone enjoys it. And I’m quite proud of getting them both to Ficlet NIrvana.

Well, consider this enjoyed. For someone who’s “not a poet,” this is sure good!
Thanks for entering!

This is good so far. I’m moving on to read the next one, although I think “baited” should be “bated” like “abated” only without the a. Baited says that they were trying to lure their breath.

Fixed. Thanks for that. Learn something new every day.

I love this!
I’m a big fan of epic poetry so this caught my eye.
Good job!