“Rudy down.â? Vardon said, and Rudy’s head disappeared. Instead of Ivana infront of the screen, Vardon was. “Hello Keylala.â? hey the second part of this sentence is in the passive vioce, but i believe you could have made this one complex sentence by combinig and simplifying and made this have suspence and a punch line. combining sentence is like a running back turning a corner it is a real big step for us writers.
“Rudy down.â? Vardon said, and Rudy’s head disappeared. Instead of Ivana infront of the screen, Vardon was. “Hello Keylala.â? hey the second part of this sentence is in the passive vioce, but i believe you could have made this one complex sentence by combinig and simplifying and made this have suspence and a punch line. combining sentence is like a running back turning a corner it is a real big step for us writers.
Mighty-Joe Young
Mighty-Joe Young