I’m very interested to see where you’re going with this.
Should be, “as you turn your head,” and probably “yellow, knowing eyes.” Other than that, brilliant.

Oh, wow. What a freaky description. I hope I never see one full-on in my true vision.

Wow. I hope you continue this! It’s one of the creepiest things I’ve read anywhere.

I want to read more so much that it’s hard for me to comment. But it deserves it because this little series has been really wonderful so far.