oh damn i didnt see those last five words coming
nice

I know a guy just like this.

The name is the same too.
Very nice

I really like this, although it’s also frustrating to read because 2008 Me would love to go back and tell Back Then Me to stop worrying and swing away. Great title, too.

I love the ending, unexpected but perfectly fitting somehow. Well crafted scene. Well done.

I agree with tbs, the ending is perfect, and you set it up (i.e. “scantily clad body”) so that it’s not what we expect to happen at all, even if Denise completely deserves it.

very good story.

Yes, perfect ending! I was hoping it would go like that! So nice to have a character we cheer for!

Welcome to Ficlets.

Oh man, I pulled something similar to Jonathan. I still haven’t decided if I made the right decision or not! I had no idea what was going to happen until the last five words. Great work!

Passing up a sure thing like that? He’ll regret that decision.
One note. You need a pronoun in this phrase: “leaned over scantily clad body.”